Published May 4, 2007
hey!!
i was wayyy drunk last
night! i'm sorry for not being able to go to
dinner with you
guys, i thought i would go
say hey
to the guys at joe's place, come back,
and do some math studying, but i got real drunk... i'm irresponsible!
i probably would have ruined it
anyway haha i hope you
had a
great time,
i'll see you
later
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I completely agree withShadow Twit.
Your poem really nees more revision, more matter, more punctuations, capital letters and more sense to it. you are just dragging the same thing over and over again in different lines.
and there should have been a definite stucture to your poem, it lacks meter and rhythm.
My! Youdidn't even bother to put a fullstop at the end or use Title Case in the title!
Presentation matters darling, it really does. try not to be lazy while typing.
Ulp. *swallows, but gives it up and promptly makes use of handy barfing bag*
*Enter appropriate quote from Gandalf here*
Romantic poetry = 144.
You need to add capitals here, and...there doesn't seem to be much structure to this poem. It doesn't seem to have a fixed meter or anything, but I didn't read it out loud or anything, which might have something to do with that. Still, don't take my word for it, as I can't write or crit poetry very well. Incandescense once said something very blighting and very true to that same effect, so my opinion isn't worth much.
Still, don't get put off by this!
-Twit